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« Reply #15 on: June 29, 2010, 07:43:59 PM »

Chapter Nine   Decoration

She had some explaining to do, but that could wait.  She held him for a long time, then quickly put him the rest of the way back together. 

He looked as good as new.  Now if there was only a way to fix her broken heart.

Wall•E was not mad.  If anything, he was more concerned for her.  But they had time to talk, and to heal, and to work out a way of communicating that would reduce the chances of a mistaken identity.  Each resolved never to let anything so silly come between them again.

This lasted something like ten minutes.  Then Eve looked up, stiffening.  One of the probes was approaching—Probe #6.  It only took a moment for Eve to realize what was happening, and she clamped down on her feelings as she gently disentangled from Wall•E and went to the door control.  Wall•E rolled to the door next to her, and took her hand.  She held on, maybe a little too tightly, but she needed reinforcement to face her sister.  And her own guilt.

The ramp door lowered to the ground, and Eve did a double take.  What had looked like dirt on Probe #6 was actually a marking.  Eve looked closely; it was a number—“6”—engraved right into the material of her torso.

“See?” the probe said.  She pointed to the number with what sounded like pride.  “Probe #6 marked.  No identification failure.”

Wall•E released her hand suddenly, and Eve was alarmed—but then Wall•E tapped his hands together excitedly.  “Evah, look!”

Eve’s head tilted as she looked at the fresh engraving.  “All probes?”

Probe #6 nodded.  “All probes.”

Eve pointed.  “How?”

Probe #6 was smiling.  Eve had never seen that before.  “Mary say.  Burn•E do!”

At last, Eve could smile in return.  She reached out to hug her sister, something she had never done before.  In shiptalk, then again in English for Wall•E’s benefit, she said simply, “Thanks.”

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Months came and went, with the humans struggling through another winter.  They spent most of their time indoors, as they had too little clothing for most to venture outside.  The robots, most of them, could continue to work.  Wall•E did what he could, including keeping the working pathways clear of snow.  He was good at this, and worked tirelessly.  It was a long, bitter time, but finally the snow retreated for another year, and work could begin again on the crops they needed to survive.

One Spring evening brought an invitation to Wall•E and Eve’s home, to visit Mary.  She had a surprise waiting for them.

Wall•E moved quickly along the trail, practically dragging Eve along by the hand.  She, smiling, seemed happy to allow herself to be dragged.

As they neared Mary’s shack, one of the earliest built with Wall•E’s re-stacked cubes, Eve spoke—her voice filled with wonder.  “All probes here.”

Wall•E looked ahead, but could not see them.  He knew that Eve could tell where they were and which one was which.  Not for the first time, Wall•E wished that he had that particular trick; it would have saved the Couple a lot of grief.  But that was all over with now.

Just in front of the home, now, they could see Mary with several other colonists, including Mari Tess the artist.  Wall•E had seen her work, and hoped to learn more about art someday; he had dabbled a little bit with welding things together, but her work was pretty.  She liked to draw an animal called a “gryphon.”  Wall•E had seen very few animals, and except for the few recovered from the Axiom, they were all just in pictures from the ship’s library.  But that was okay.  Thanks to Mari’s work, Wall•E knew what a gryphon looked like.

She drew lots of other things besides.  Maybe she had done some artwork over the winter for Mary and John.  Wall•E and Eve rolled forward in happy anticipation.

They skidded to a stop as they rounded the corner.  Tucked around the side, waiting for them, were all of the probes just as Eve had said.  But they were different.  Wall•E clapped his hands together in delight.  “Look, Evah!”

Each of the probes now sported a decorative pattern on the once-white shells.  The numbers were still there, but each pattern was unique.

One by one, each of the newly-painted probes came forward and introduced herself, first to Eve and then to Wall•E.  Each had a name, now.

“Probe #3 Embra,” said the first.  “Embra,” she repeated, pointing at herself.  Her happy blue eyes set in the black face panel now hovered over a swirling pattern of black swooping shapes running across her torso.

“Erin,” Probe #4 said.  Green plants adorned this shell, with rounded leaves that were different from the plants in their crops and from the first plant Wall•E found.  He always had a happy thought for plants, and he hoped that Erin’s new pattern would bring her luck as plants had for him.

“Ellie” came next, wearing a bright, swirling yellow pattern that seemed to long for the sky, and for adventure.  “Echa” and “Ekra” and “Efra” and “Ebra” followed, each one different in her colorful dots or swirling curves or angled patterns.

They gathered around Mary’s home, talking and laughing into the evening.  Everyone, including the sisters, complimented Mari on her work. 

Dave Grayson made something of a fuss over each one, explaining why that one was his favorite.  Then he would move on to the next and repeat the process—until he finally confessed that they were all his favorite.

It was a long happy time later before Wall•E and Eve made it back to their home.

“Wall•E?” she said, as she held on tightly to his hand in the twinkling lights of their home.

Wall•E gazed at her, noting how her own shell reflected the colorful lights he’d found so long ago.  “Evah,” he said.

“Wall•E … want Eve paint?”

He reached out and took her other hand.

“For Wall•E,” he said very seriously, “Evah is perfect.”

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The Painted Sisters (designed by our very own GryphonWorks):

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My thanks, once again, to GryphonWorks and her artwork contributions, including the Painted Sisters above and the marvelous cover art for the novel Colony Crisis.

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« Reply #16 on: June 30, 2010, 12:55:31 PM »

 Cheesy I love it. I always wanted to read more about the Too-many incident, and now I did. ANd you did a wonderful job Level_Head. Smiley

 
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« Reply #17 on: July 09, 2010, 04:12:49 PM »

You've heard me gush on about how much I love this piece but it doesn't hurt to say it again; you've done a splendid job capturing everyone's personalities and exploring the progression of Eve's emotions as her sisters move in.  Not once did anyone ever feel out-of-character and every scene flowed seamlessly to the next.  Thank you again for your beautiful entry!
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« Reply #18 on: July 09, 2010, 06:24:50 PM »

Thank you, folks!

This was aimed at GryphonWorks specifically, but I'd hoped that all would enjoy it.

Obviously this business is mentioned in Colony Crisis, but I intended that you wouldn't need that background to follow along.  Everybody knows the Couple!

The story has its painful spots, but when our pair finally get past that, they've earned the deep commitment they share.  The film had its own tense and heart-wrenching moments.

I wonder how many have read this?

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« Reply #19 on: July 10, 2010, 12:41:09 AM »

It is so nice to see more of the Colony Crisis works.  Even better, a WALL-E and EVE story of struggle that fits perfectly.  EVE, complex and passionate, WALL-E, always so forgiving and innocent. Commitment is not without complications, but WALL-E and EVE live through them hand-in-hand.

I wonder how many have read this?

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« Reply #20 on: July 11, 2010, 07:22:55 PM »

There are two Easter Eggs in this story--one is a reference to music from the film, and the other to Pixar's next adventure.

Amusingly, the Easter Egg to the following film was created before I knew what that film was about or who the characters would be -- it was an accidental coincidence between GryphonWorks and myself.  But it worked out nicely.

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« Reply #21 on: July 17, 2010, 05:53:09 PM »

Smiley Briliant. You are a completely AWESOME writer! I love Colony Crisis, I still haven't given you my whole opinion but I'm working on the PM, it's long, but I hope you like it when I send it. But it is an absolute pleasure and honor to have read such a great story. And honestly, it is my new favorite book. Along with I sent it to two of my friends and told them to tell me what they thought, so I'm also waiting on that part of my PM. Again, great work and... YOU ARE AWESOME!
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« Reply #22 on: July 26, 2010, 07:56:20 PM »

Excellent! If there is ever another Fan Fiction contest, you should nominate this!
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« Reply #23 on: July 26, 2010, 10:18:38 PM »

Smiley Briliant. You are a completely AWESOME writer! I love Colony Crisis, I still haven't given you my whole opinion but I'm working on the PM, it's long, but I hope you like it when I send it. But it is an absolute pleasure and honor to have read such a great story. And honestly, it is my new favorite book. Along with I sent it to two of my friends and told them to tell me what they thought, so I'm also waiting on that part of my PM. Again, great work and... YOU ARE AWESOME!

Thank you.  I'm glad you enjoyed it.  (And the book, of course!)

It was enjoyable to put some flesh on this event as it was barely mentioned (and described only from Wall•E's point of view) in Colony Crisis.  This little story was pretty intense for the participants--but obviously nothing like what they had to deal with in Colony Crisis.

I'm inclined to move this over to the Fan Fiction area.  There are a number of typos that I'll go back and fix at the same time.  This was written in a hurry, starting Saturday night *June 26) and sinishing it for the anniversary.  It's (even) sloppier than is usual for me.

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« Reply #24 on: July 26, 2010, 11:36:35 PM »

Excellent! If there is ever another Fan Fiction contest, you should nominate this!

Thank you.  We haven't had one for a while, and it would be good to see some new stories set entirely in the universe of the film.  The crossover stories are often amusing, but the pure world of WALL•E has so much that is yet unexplored.

Perhaps you'll try your hand in that arena?

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« Reply #25 on: August 03, 2010, 08:31:21 AM »

Incredible. Simply incredible. Kiss I read the entire story just now, this morning, expecting a more lighthearted story that could start off my day better. What I got was an amazing and clever story that took me on a joyride of emotion that I haven't read in a story in a very long time, let alone one that had to do with my favorite robot couple. Smiley


I admit, I didn't know what was being referred to with the title "The Too-Many Incident" until after I had read the entire thing. I admit....I haven't read Colony Crisis. Embarrassed Mainly because the first impression I got of it was stumbling across a chapter of it containing a topic that remains controversial even in my own mind. Embarrassed I know, it's silly of me...

But besides that, this story is definitely one of the better ones i've experienced during these past few months. Smiley It's a great read, a great start to my day, and even though it may have made me sad, worried, and even angry at times (occasionally even at the story itself for making me sad and worried Embarrassed), now that i've finished it, in the end, i'm just glad that it made me feel that way so I could have a better experience. Happy WALL-E
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« Reply #26 on: August 03, 2010, 04:23:35 PM »

Incredible. Simply incredible. Kiss I read the entire story just now, this morning, expecting a more lighthearted story that could start off my day better. What I got was an amazing and clever story that took me on a joyride of emotion that I haven't read in a story in a very long time, let alone one that had to do with my favorite robot couple. Smiley

Thank you!  This is not technically an excerpt from Colony Crisis, but characters in that story reference this as something that took place in the past.  And there are other clues here that figure into the larger story.

If anything, Colony Crisis is a grander, more intense story than this one.  The stakes are high.

I admit, I didn't know what was being referred to with the title "The Too-Many Incident" until after I had read the entire thing. I admit....I haven't read Colony Crisis. Embarrassed Mainly because the first impression I got of it was stumbling across a chapter of it containing a topic that remains controversial even in my own mind. Embarrassed I know, it's silly of me...

But besides that, this story is definitely one of the better ones i've experienced during these past few months. Smiley It's a great read, a great start to my day, and even though it may have made me sad, worried, and even angry at times (occasionally even at the story itself for making me sad and worried Embarrassed), now that i've finished it, in the end, i'm just glad that it made me feel that way so I could have a better experience. Happy WALL-E

I'm glad you liked it.  I would be pleased to send you the updated, expanded, cleaned-up version of CC.  Judging by your reaction here, I think it's a safe bet that you will enjoy the novel.

By the way, what was the controversial topic? I'd guess that it was the level of English speech of the Couple.

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« Reply #27 on: August 03, 2010, 05:38:26 PM »

Incredible. Simply incredible. Kiss I read the entire story just now, this morning, expecting a more lighthearted story that could start off my day better. What I got was an amazing and clever story that took me on a joyride of emotion that I haven't read in a story in a very long time, let alone one that had to do with my favorite robot couple. Smiley

Thank you!  This is not technically an excerpt from Colony Crisis, but characters in that story reference this as something that took place in the past.  And there are other clues here that figure into the larger story.

If anything, Colony Crisis is a grander, more intense story than this one.  The stakes are high.

I admit, I didn't know what was being referred to with the title "The Too-Many Incident" until after I had read the entire thing. I admit....I haven't read Colony Crisis. Embarrassed Mainly because the first impression I got of it was stumbling across a chapter of it containing a topic that remains controversial even in my own mind. Embarrassed I know, it's silly of me...

But besides that, this story is definitely one of the better ones i've experienced during these past few months. Smiley It's a great read, a great start to my day, and even though it may have made me sad, worried, and even angry at times (occasionally even at the story itself for making me sad and worried Embarrassed), now that i've finished it, in the end, i'm just glad that it made me feel that way so I could have a better experience. Happy WALL-E

I'm glad you liked it.  I would be pleased to send you the updated, expanded, cleaned-up version of CC.  Judging by your reaction here, I think it's a safe bet that you will enjoy the novel.

By the way, what was the controversial topic? I'd guess that it was the level of English speech of the Couple.

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Well, my first impression came from dropping in on the middle of the story, to see what the thick of it would be like. At the time, it turned out to be (I believe) Chapter 26...
...the part where Wall-E and Eve get married.
It's just one of those things that keeps cropping up in my mind. I know it's one of those things that's pretty widely accepted as fairly normal for the couple, but to me, it's just never been right in my mind. In my mind, the ultimate symbol of their undying love has always been them simply holding hands, and even the fact that they want to spend the rest of their lives in each other's presence; it kind of makes a ring and a ceremony a little redundant, even a little awkward. (I mean, no matter how human they seem....they're still robots. They don't have to go through the same things that humans do.) And even then, Wall-E and Eve have both done plenty much to prove how much they truly love each other, and they don't need a wedding ring to show that.

...at least that's what I think. Nervous Laugh Embarrassed I've just kept it...reserved until now, because i'm embarrassed to say this in public. I'm pretty sure that nobody else here shares my thoughts on the matter, that's why Relieved But if this kind of storytelling is what I have to expect of Colony Crisis, then I would love to read the all-new minty-fresh version of the story that so many people on here have loved. Wink Happy WALL-E I just don't want to read something like "Hold My Hand" that tries to leave me blubbering uncontrollably with every new installment Tongue and if this piece here is any indication of what's to come, i'm sure it won't be Smiley

(and I guess I admit that in both this story and the short excerpt of CC that I read, I was a little caught off-guard by the level of English that both Wall-E and Eve were able to speak. Grin But I enjoyed the fact that in both instances it was all kept in-character and believable, and with that in mind, I think I was/will be wrapped up in the plot enough that it won't be a problem Wink)
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« Reply #28 on: August 03, 2010, 08:47:03 PM »

Well, my first impression came from dropping in on the middle of the story, to see what the thick of it would be like. At the time, it turned out to be (I believe) Chapter 26...

Ah, I understand.  There's a lot more material now, including about thirty chapters in front of the one you're thinking of, and that scene has changed somewhat.

I struggled a bit with this myself.  A lot happens in the story that changes what might be something of an absurdity into a reasonable, necessary thing.  It's really all Dave Grayson's fault, as you'll see.  His own struggles rubbed off a bit on the Couple, especially Wall•E.

But first we have to back the story up, some seven hundred ten years, to a time when the Axiom and the other great liners were still under construction, stark silhouettes in the murky distance.  A chain of events, centuries apart but inextricably linked, will change lives and perhaps explain a few odd aspects of the film.

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...at least that's what I think. Nervous Laugh Embarrassed I've just kept it...reserved until now, because i'm embarrassed to say this in public. I'm pretty sure that nobody else here shares my thoughts on the matter, that's why Relieved

You and I are closer in this than you might think.  I greatly value your opinion, and am keen to hear what you think after you come out the other side of that story.

But if this kind of storytelling is what I have to expect of Colony Crisis, then I would love to read the all-new minty-fresh version of the story that so many people on here have loved. Wink Happy WALL-E I just don't want to read something like "Hold My Hand" that tries to leave me blubbering uncontrollably with every new installment Tongue and if this piece here is any indication of what's to come, i'm sure it won't be Smiley

(and I guess I admit that in both this story and the short excerpt of CC that I read, I was a little caught off-guard by the level of English that both Wall-E and Eve were able to speak. Grin But I enjoyed the fact that in both instances it was all kept in-character and believable, and with that in mind, I think I was/will be wrapped up in the plot enough that it won't be a problem Wink)

Here, too, I'll be interested in what you think.  Some time has passed--nine years, by the time we catch up with the Couple in Part II.  Both are bright, and both were learning during the film.  I think that, as motivated as they are, they will continue to learn.

Nevertheless, they are not "people" and their modes of expression aren't human.  They're not even the same as each other, for that matter: I've tried to be true to their characters, and you can tell who's speaking just from their modes of speech.

And both are struggling with an aspect of BnL's programming--which figures into events later.

But now, I'll let you be.  You have documents in your email, and for me it's (as Eve would  say) "Time to do."

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« Reply #29 on: August 05, 2010, 04:50:44 PM »

Yeah, I was kind of confused in the book when Wall-e described it and so I was glad to see that you have the actual event up, and it made me shiver at some points.
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